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0 posted 2007-06-26 09:08 PM



There is a thrusting aftershock in my mind
the way fear pushes,
but my heart pulls back so agrressively.
Is this the friction
that causes my eyes to fill with electricity
every time I see you?

However,
there are still some insulators,
and they are preventing the flow of me
from being a good conductor
of your love.

It is time to flip the switch,
and time to sumbit.
You have been waiting,
and it's been such a long time.
You see,
many soft hands have caused a power surge,
but you are the one
that is making me short circuit.

Peace. Love. Forgiveness.
  Blessings and Guidance

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1 posted 2007-06-26 09:10 PM


now this is awesome
you are going to be a good one to read

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2 posted 2007-06-26 09:11 PM


Why thank you.
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3 posted 2007-06-27 05:46 AM


Blessed is the person that causes you to short circuit.
Clockwork_Orange
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4 posted 2007-06-27 09:24 AM


pretty goooood man.

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5 posted 2007-06-27 03:26 PM


Blessed is the person indeed.  It's not very easy is to cause me to short circuit.

Peace. Love. Forgiveness.
  Blessings and Guidance

Jezzika
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6 posted 2007-06-27 10:34 PM


DUDE!!
This was so amazing...
I really liked it and I liked how well the whole thing flowed..
AMAZING!!!!!!

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7 posted 2007-06-27 10:50 PM


Thank you Jezzika, I am pleased to hear that you liked it.

Peace. Love. Forgiveness.
  Blessings and Guidance

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8 posted 2007-07-03 08:40 AM


loved it...made me smile just reading how well your thoughts came across! Welcome~~

M

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9 posted 2007-07-04 09:26 PM


Thank you for your comments nakdthoughts.  It is well appreciated.  I'm glad you liked the poem.

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