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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2006-12-15 12:45 PM



What is true?
hunnie

I didn't know it would hurt this bad,
I didn't know i'd feel this sad,
my sister told me you found someone new,
maybe i should have said, "I'll go out with you"

When you asked me out what did you expect me to say,
pretending I don't love you gets harder everyday,
but I couldn't say yes, you were my best friend,
you came to me one day, you were my godsend,

One day you'll turn around and see,
you shouldn't have been, with someone messed up like me,
finally I guess you understood,
it has to be over between us for good,

I didn't want no to be my reply,
but you found someone else so i'll just have to lie,
say I don't have those feelings for you,
even though in our hearts we both know it's not true,

I didn't know it would hurt this bad,
I didn't know i'd feel this sad,
I didn't think you'd move on that fast,
I didn't realize we wouldn't last.

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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whitelielovely
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1 posted 2006-12-15 01:20 PM


wow i've felt that way and it's no fun. thank you for yo're posts, it makes me feel like someone's listening. i guess that's why i joined to have people listen and not be afriad to critique.

well i feel the hurt in some places. i think the first and last stanzas were my favorites.

-Lovely

Abbeon
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2 posted 2006-12-15 10:46 PM


hunnie you know we will never leave like that kay plus thats an amazing poem

*Abbeon*

nick_lyss
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3 posted 2006-12-18 02:24 PM


hey i really liked this poem. it was really good. you and have something in commom. i still have feelings for my ex boyfriend.its hard for me to hide them when im around him all my feelings for him all come out.

                       courtney

hunnie_girl
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4 posted 2006-12-18 08:43 PM


Thanks y'all. I think i know exactly how you feel Courtney, I really hope you can get over him.
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

stargal
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5 posted 2006-12-19 12:29 PM


Hi Hunnie,

Yah, it's me, at last! lol

Wonderful poem; I can so understand where you are coming from on this one. Having broke up with my ex a few years back and still feeling pain over that relationship... In some ways it's for the best though... Anyway, awesome poem, glad I decided to come and read it! Thanks for sharing!

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino            @-->---

hunnie_girl
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6 posted 2006-12-19 10:43 PM


wow Stargal i really thot you were missing:P
thanks
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

wwzwlmd8
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7 posted 2007-01-27 01:22 AM


That was GREAT the best I've hear in a long time. That was powerful and I really liked It.


buttercupbaby
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8 posted 2007-01-27 10:27 AM


Wow hunnie really great poem! I know we all experience some sort of pain in our life's, and its sad that so many of us have dealt with the pain over a guy

I really love this poem, you kept the rhythm, and it wasn't forced..the only thing i didn't exactly like the first time i read it was the last line in the first paragraph, but the more i read it, it came easier.
really amazing write! no matter what i read of your's i ALWAYS say that!!!: )

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

poemqueen
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9 posted 2007-01-29 04:48 PM


great poem!!


lemonraindrops
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10 posted 2007-01-30 10:01 PM


Wow definately sounds like a real life experience. Love the emotion. Ahh...so sad though.  =(
Much Love
Elyse

Walter Poe
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11 posted 2007-02-02 09:32 AM


Well glad i chose to read your poems today this is almost perfect flow  even i was hard pushed to find anything i would change (and you know how picky i can be) there is the odd thing but lets face it this doesn't really need anything else.

To take a lot of pain,
take a lot of pain
Love is like a cloud,
holds a lot of rain

hunnie_girl
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12 posted 2007-02-02 08:24 PM


thank you all for your replies. much appreciated
hunnie

~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~

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