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yvetters_24
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since 2006-08-27
Posts 52
california

0 posted 2006-12-06 09:58 PM


think back
retrace your tracks
to find you were the only one ever holding you back
as the clock ticks life away
you got nothing to say
so just sit back and let life fade away
never put up a fight
you to weak
the world will never take you light
your not even worth being in sight
so just crawl up and hide
youve all ready been overtaken by the tide
sit back and fear the ride
you already let your shot slip
now just stand and watch as the tears drip
your dreams down the drain
the rain will never wash you clean
now let this be driled into your brain
you no longer have a choice of your own mind frame
you have no thoughts of your own
nothing but a mindless drone
its done its over
you got no tracks to retrace
youve been dropped out of the reace flat on your face
your will to go on is gone
you will never be what you want
the clock is winding down
dont frown because you know its true
three
two
one
zero yeah thats you

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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world
1 posted 2006-12-10 11:57 AM


Wow...I must say that though there were some gramatical errors and some of the rhyming was forced, the ending blew me away. I was not expecting it and it was very powerful. I'm suprised no one else has responded to this. Well keep it up, very nice write and hope to see more!

Erin

AIM-beatufu1tragidy

Tell me what you think about being open, about being honest with yourself.

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