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Teen Poetry #8

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buttercupbaby
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since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

0 posted 2006-12-04 04:21 PM

A relationship is like a rose,
how long it lasts, no one knows.
love can erase an awful past,
love can be yours, you'll see at last
to feel that love makes you sigh
to have it leave, you'd rather die
you hope you've found that special rose,
cause you love and care for the one you chose"

i didn't write this, my friend did. i just wanted to see if anyone had any ideas to add to it. . .she just was wondering if it could be lengthened or anything. thanks!

nick_lyss
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since 2006-08-21

Posts 88

1 posted 2006-12-05 03:57 PM

hi missy

i lke this poem. i think she should leave it the way it is.

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-12-05 11:54 PM

yea i really liked this. i can't think of anything to change. it has a good length, flow and very nice content...very good.
hunnie

Better a witty fool than a foolish wit.
- Shakespeare

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