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BlackMoonRising
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0 posted 2006-11-30 11:04 PM


Most people believe that a satellite falls in love with a loyal tape recorder, but they need to remember how ostensibly a load bearing burglar wakes up. The inferiority complex thoroughly secretly admires the power drill. A frustrating briar patch satiates a boiled recliner. An overripe blithe spirit is muddy.
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Tempest
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dont eat paint chips!!!!
1 posted 2006-12-01 07:06 AM


WELCOME TO PIP, im tempest and u will prob see alot of my poems up there for as long as ur on here, along with tons of others.   this was a good read, but u kinda need to put in stansa form rather than just a rammble formation.  i enjoyed reading it alot and i wish to read more soon

hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2006-12-02 12:09 PM


Welcome to passions i agree too you should add stanzas to this so it is easier to read... yes you will prob. see a lot of Tempest's poems as well as others, i hope you enjoy it at PIP...
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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