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wwzwlmd8
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0 posted 2006-11-27 10:34 PM



I sit on my porch waiting for you,
waiting until you come,waiting for you to get home.
I stay up late in a room filled with darkness,
Darkness filling every corner, nothing beside me just me,me alone.
I cry myself to sleep knowing your not there,
I'M THOUGH WAITING, WAITING FOR YOU TO COME WAITING FOR YOU TO GET HOME.
I'M DONE!


[This message has been edited by wwzwlmd8 (11-28-2006 06:05 PM).]

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1 posted 2006-11-28 07:06 AM


nice,short, but nice. i liked it alot. and i think u ment through, not thought in the last bit.
rhia_5779
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2 posted 2006-11-28 09:26 AM


wuts with the Im done?
wwzwlmd8
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3 posted 2006-11-28 06:02 PM


The I'm done means im thrw waiting around for him.


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4 posted 2006-11-28 11:41 PM


~Darkness filling every corner, nothing beside me just me,me alone.~
this not only is my favorite part i also think it is the strongest, depthwise(that should be a word ever thoung it isn't)
hope to read more soon...
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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