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Tempest
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since 2006-04-28
Posts 247
dont eat paint chips!!!!

0 posted 2006-11-25 12:02 PM


its raining outside
the drops beat down
and i can hear them hit the ground
so softly, so softly

and i cant stand to hear you cry
so please just dry your eyes
wipe away the tears
put away the goodbyes

sunken dreams in a deep black sea
make me fall down to my knees
as it grows dark and hard to breath
i just close my eyes and dream

sorry i couldnt make it right
before the pain and before the fights
i want to take all this away
i wish there was some way, just some way...

no more more hopes and no more dreams
there were lost out at sea
im sorry
im sorry

© Copyright 2006 Bryan Girton - All Rights Reserved
wwzwlmd8
Member
since 2006-09-23
Posts 96
San Diego,CA
1 posted 2006-11-25 01:28 AM


Not a thing needs to be change it was a really great poem and I can really relate to it. This poem made me feel what you were writing about and it was a really asome and intense, and I loved it.

p.s read my poem I just posted up


Clockwork_Orange
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since 2007-03-23
Posts 620
Space Camp, IN
2 posted 2007-06-21 11:43 PM


wow.
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