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I Wasn't Enough For You
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I Wasn't Enough For You |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world 
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So maybe my eyes don’t sparkle just right, Maybe I am too stubborn, and always put up a fight. Maybe my hair isn’t always in place, Maybe I don’t have a beautiful supermodel’s face. So maybe I spend my time consumed in words, And talk about things no one’s ever heard. Maybe for once you met someone new, But you couldn’t stay, I wasn’t enough for you. You get up on your high horse, mighty and strong, Hiding that your life is so full of everything wrong. So I wasn’t perfect, what makes you think you are? What makes you think it’s ok to leave so many scars? You walked over me, left your prints across my face, My tears blended in with your words of anguish and disgrace. You thought I was yours to control and contort, So you’d shift me around, all you did was distort. Why wasn’t being me ever enough for you? All I got were lies when all I gave was truth. What about me did you not like, what about me was so wrong? Cause I got plenty about you, baby, I have a whole song. After awhile it became very plain to see, That you were never the one meant for me, When every effort, every thing I’d try to do, was proof alone that I wasn’t enough for you. AIM-beatufu1tragidy |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Hiding that your life is so full of (everything) wrong.**delete parentheses So I wasn’t perfect, what makes you think you are? What makes you think it’s ok to leave me scarred? I really liked those two stanzas. I can relate. Sometimes being yourself isn't enough for people. Yah then maybe it means its not worth it. But once you know that, what next? NO one ever says what to do then. Cuz you still have to be around that person. Why wasn’t being me ever enough for you? All I got were lies when all I gave was truth. What about me did you not like, what about me was so wrong? Cause I got plenty about you, baby, I have a whole song. After awhile it became very plain to see, That you were never the one meant for me, When every effort, every thing I’d try to do, was proof alone that I wasn’t enough for you. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
After awhile it became very plain to see, That you were never the one meant for me, When every effort, every thing I’d try to do, was proof alone that I wasn’t enough for you. you amaze me with every poem, it showed feeling and had a good flow... hunnie  A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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The Shadow in Blue Member
since 2006-05-18
Posts 493EL, Michigan |
You seem to have the knack for making things flow just right (rhyme scheme, length, word choice.). I especially liked this stanza. "You get up on your high horse, mighty and strong, Hiding that your life is so full of everything wrong. So I wasn’t perfect, what makes you think you are? What makes you think it’s ok to leave so many scars?" The messenge you portray in your words is simple, yet beautiful. My favorite poem of yours so far. |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
i love your word choice as well, forgive my spelling, i'm not very good. it flowed and i love when it rhymes like that thats how i love to see them flow. you go girl, and nver give it up/ W.L. Lovely |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I read this like a while back and I thought that I commented but I guess not.. this was wonderful.. one of your best. I love the way you write and this had so much I could relate to.. Great job.. Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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