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These Tears |
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Flipnfly62992 New Member
since 2006-11-16
Posts 5 |
Tears These tears. These emotions. Coursing through my veins. This anger This hatred. Something I can’t explain. How could you let me fall? Expecting you to catch me. Yet I hit the ground so hard That helped me build this wall This wall of hate This wall of anger Then you tell me its okay And just to wait My heart’s in danger Waiting for you Only to be trapped in you gaze The way your twisted mind works The way your eyes twinkle Like a confusing endless maze This pain grows. These tears shed. All your words Continuously echo and dance Around in my head. I just want it to stop These words of hate This feeling of loneliness This unsettling state. But your voice it still echoes And your words they still dance Along the chasms of my mind And straight through my veins You don’t even deserve a glance At this broken girl you left behind. |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Waiting for you Only to be trapped in you gaze The way your twisted mind works The way your eyes twinkle Like a confusing (endless) maze What is in parenthese you can delete. I really liked this. But your voice it still echoes And your words they still dance Along the chasms of my mind And straight through my veins You don’t even deserve a glance At this broken girl you left behind. It was really good. Summed it rather nicely. Nice job. |
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Sarka Junior Member
since 2006-09-21
Posts 23Canada |
I just want it to stop These words of hate This feeling of loneliness This unsettling state. But your voice it still echoes And your words they still dance Along the chasms of my mind And straight through my veins You don’t even deserve a glance At this broken girl you left behind. i liked the ending it summed it up nicley... very nice i hope to read more soon... hope thats brutal enough:P hunnie  ~If we didn't have any bad days, we wouldn't appreciate the good ones~ |
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