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Material Sunset |
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MixedChica Junior Member
since 2006-11-10
Posts 34 |
We buy sastisfaction these days As we stare at our broken sky's grays Our bellies are filled Our champagne is chilled but we can't see the sunset anymore everyone of us is just another material bore Smoke pours from our warm fireplaces Make-up drenches our bleak faces We buy and buy but its never enough theres not enough heart in our expensive stuff We can't see the sunset anymore We've clouded the skies with out material war Ok so i never really finnished this and i don't know where to go with it. Any feedback would be great, thanks! |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
wut about theres not enough filling in our expensive stuff Nice write. Welcome to PiP Rhia |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
chica, wow i crittiqued u and then got ur email lol. u no hoo i am. glad u joined |
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