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Teen Poetry #8

Stand on Stand

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

0 posted 2006-11-06 09:48 PM

Im not sure I should fall for you
I dont know where Id land
Should I dare and take the jump
or here, where I stand

When I picture myself
With someone else
They always seem like you
Talk like you do
Sound like you do
Smart like you are

And so I wish upon a star…

That in your house
Where you are
That from my house
Is not too far

You dream of me
And all my traits
I hope you think I have
A somewhat pretty face

I hope you think
Of me as smart
And recognize
My poetry as art

Im not sure I should fall for you
I don’t know if Id land

Should I fall for you
And touch the sky…

Or stay and stand on sand…

Mr. Omniscient
Member

since 2006-10-28

Posts 134

1 posted 2006-11-06 10:21 PM

I like this a lot. Very well written.

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

2 posted 2006-11-07 10:40 PM

Whoa, yeah, its deep, not too long, which is good, you really didn't need to many words for how you feel in this one. It was plain, simple, and GREAT! hehe. Good job.

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Free_Spirit07
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~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

3 posted 2006-11-08 04:00 PM

I like the last line it was a good ending

pen&paper
Senior Member

since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

4 posted 2006-11-12 06:03 PM

GRATZI!!!!

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