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Comparisson |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK 
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She slams two photo's, Down on the table. She says the are why, She is so unstable. I know what they are, Both set in the same scene. One is of a little girl, The other or an abnoxious teen. The little girl sits, Playing dolls on the floor. The person taking the photo, Is stood at the door. Her blonde bourncy curls, Fall to cover one eye. She doesn't look at the camera, Because she is shy. The eye that is showing, Is bright blue and twinkles. You can tell she is giggling, From the way her nose wrinkles. When I look to the other picture, Tears fill my eyes. I curl up in shame, To watch as my mother cries. The teenager is sat, In the very same place. But she looks distraught and cold, No smile on this face. Here straightened blone hair, Delibratley covers one eye. This girl is not shy, She looks at the camera this time. The eye that is showing, Is blue and cold. Her closed body language, Screams for someone to hold. 'Both of the pictures, Show my little princess. But I cannot express the pain, I feel with the disntance.' I look at my mother, Then return my stare to the ground, I try to speak, But cannot make a sound. Is this really how I have evolved? Into a lying cheatin Cow? I'm making a promise to change, I've just got to figure out how! Belinda Black |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
Very nice story line. My fav of the ones you have written so far. |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK |
Hey thank you for the comment..  Belinda~x |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
wow this was very good i thought it had a nice flow. i'm not too fixed on the ending wasn't my favorite but it fit ok. very good hope to read more soon... hunnie  A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
this does have a good flow to it and i know that changing can be hard i wish i could help but i am going through a similar thing. Laura 1 Timothy 4:12 |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! |
Wow this was really good. loved the storyline. made me really feel ur intensity |
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Belinda Member
since 2006-01-30
Posts 126UK |
Thank you for all the comments. Yes I agree changing is hard and it's just something I've been thinking about for a while really.. thanks again Belinda~x Expect nothing, Prepare for anything. |
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