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forever*wishing
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since 2006-05-29
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where my heart is

0 posted 2006-10-29 05:45 PM


she's walking on this beaten road
folowing her shadow shes all alone
no one is with her or by her side
SHE doesn't even know if shes alright

people see her and walk away
because they dont like it, theyre afraid
they couldn't imagine being that cold
they've just never been alone

she doesn't mind since its always that way
she wouldn't even know if she walked astray
no one will tell her where to go
so she folows the same dark lonely road

her shadow stretches farther every passing second
hard is the air being pushed by the wind
she doesn't realize how much time has gone by
her feeling of life is soon to die

but on she walks past every thing she once loved
now it means nothing more than the dark sky above
this is her life from now on till she dies
walking alone in the dark she cries


~me, depressed again...


[This message has been edited by forever*wishing (10-29-2006 09:47 PM).]

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hunnie_girl
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1 posted 2006-10-29 11:45 PM


i loved this poem forever*wishing i can relate to this very well and i agree being depressed sux it's really hard to get over, it takes time and it is important maybe to get help i know i hated the idea at first i was embarassed about it but i did it and it helped a lot...
best wishes,
hunnie

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

buttercupbaby
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since 2006-05-03
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outside in the rain
2 posted 2006-10-30 09:08 AM


woah--really, really, reallly good write! i can't believe how you didn't even put a rhyme in each paragraph for flow, but it flowed anyway! i was in complete and total awe at that!! <

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
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California
3 posted 2006-10-30 09:37 AM


emotiona and well written piece. it did have rymes in every paragraph.
forever*wishing
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since 2006-05-29
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where my heart is
4 posted 2006-10-30 11:03 AM


thanx u guys
= )

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