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Teen Poetry #8

Count On Me

pen&paper
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since 2006-06-06

Posts 513

0 posted 2007-06-24 07:28 PM

I know you've made some bad descisions
That have led you down the wrong path
Satan's got his grip on you
And, oh, he's holdin' fast

You never had the chance
To be carefree and innocent
But you act like you dont care
And say "That's the way the world is."

And, yeah, your mind's been clouded
By everything unclean
You surrounded by darkness
And you've forgotten how to see
They're closing in on you
And you're struggling to breathe

But you can make it through
If only you just try
You still have a chance
Reach out and take God's hand

He'll help you find your way
Just like He did for me
He'll raise you up to walk
And He'll help your blind eyes see

That in your hour of darkness
You can always count on me.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2007-06-24 11:08 PM

I just got Ozzy's new CD...this reminds me of one of the songs on there! very nicely done

surf_painter
Member

since 2007-04-10

Posts 434
Canada

2 posted 2007-06-26 07:19 PM

that was a good poem i liked the way you worded it and the way it read

Gifted
Member

since 2007-06-26

Posts 140
Caribbean

3 posted 2007-06-26 07:23 PM

This was a nice poem indeed. I like the message that it sends out. However, some of the lines didn't flow as good as they should have, but a good poem nevertheless.

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