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RevengeIsMine
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0 posted 2006-10-21 06:52 AM


Life, Learn To Live……  


Over The past few years I have learnt a lot about me
I’ve learnt about who I am, who I can become and who I will truly never be
I’ve travelled the journey they seem to call our life
I’ve seen the tears a grown man has cried for his dying wife

Life surely isn’t what I expect and I’d rather give it up
But I’ve learnt that failure is never an option even if your life is completely messed up.
Everybody has a reason to live, a motive to carry on
And even when you feel as low as this earth, trust me the journeys just begun

Every second of the day another heart is heard weeping,
It’s the sound of shattered glass, for another life is bleeding
This Young girl is tired and lost inside
She’s giving up on it all now. She can’t find her true pride

Live life for the people who no longer believe
Live life for the moment, grow up and don’t be naïve
Live life knowing that tomorrow is a new day and we can face it as a team
Live life knowing that world can be whatever you make it, just find your voice, and close your eyes, learn to DREAM!!!

[This message has been edited by RevengeIsMine (10-21-2006 08:13 PM).]

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rhia_5779
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1 posted 2006-10-21 04:01 PM


Very good, but the title should Be :Learn to dream: well i think so
RevengeIsMine
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2 posted 2006-10-21 08:12 PM


Oh i never thought of that Thanx heaps.
bekahlekah45
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3 posted 2006-10-21 09:12 PM


lol i havent read the whole thing but i hafta ask...are you from the south? (united states) cuz learnt is a southern word.
: ) i'll read the rest later. im tired and need to go to bed so be expecing a comment from me tomorrow. : )

RevengeIsMine
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4 posted 2006-10-21 09:17 PM


bekahlekah45, na i am an Aussie , through and through. I Guess we use learnt all the time now. Sorry if its annoying..
hunnie_girl
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5 posted 2006-10-22 12:04 PM


Live life for the people who no longer believe
Live life for the moment, grow up and don’t be naïve
Live life knowing that tomorrow is a new day and we can face it as a team
Live life knowing that world can be whatever you make it, just find your voice, and close your eyes, learn to DREAM!!!

i liked the end a lot it added tons of meaning to the poem...
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

rhia_5779
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6 posted 2006-10-22 04:12 AM


This is offtopic but my puppy is an australian sheperd. Sry but we call he breed aussies.

Liked your poem though alot, happy to help

bekahlekah45
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7 posted 2006-10-22 10:07 PM


ooh this was good : )
i did like it.
flow was a little rough but it was good and i like it!

Tempest
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dont eat paint chips!!!!
8 posted 2006-10-23 07:27 PM


YOU FRIKIN ROCK MY FRIEKIN SOCKS!! god i think i just pied my pants after reading this! YOU HAVE A WAY WITH WORDS! you rock keep it up. most def goin in my library

This is the only life you have, so live it to be remembered

Tempest
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dont eat paint chips!!!!
9 posted 2006-10-23 07:30 PM


oh i forgot, i wanted to ask you to read my poem Poetry Is The Only Escape it would really mean alot
Mr. Omniscient
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10 posted 2006-11-01 08:24 PM


WOW! That was really really really good. I can't wait to see your next one.

*wishfull*thinking*
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11 posted 2006-11-02 02:12 PM


yea i agree with tempest i thought it was good but it was quite rough in certain places..... very good keep it up


dani x

Cause all we know is falling, it falls.
Remember how, cause I know that we won't forget at all.

So this is how it goes
Well I, I would have never

pencil&paper
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asleep somewhere in my head
12 posted 2006-12-09 12:28 PM


great poem, i love the last stanza

"Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet

poemqueen
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13 posted 2006-12-09 06:11 PM


good poem
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