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Teen Poetry #8

Dreamer[alternate title, "clear"]

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

0 posted 2006-10-18 04:25 PM

I Looked your way
and felt my heart flutter
i noticed you were looking back
and thats when i first became a dreamer.

my cheeks got real red
and my heart beat real fast
i was so embarresed by your smile
my body had a total blast, i felt a sigh and i was aghast.

i didn't even know your name
but amazingly, somehow you knew mine
i knew i soon would be madly in love
oh it would be so divine!

i didn't think about the pain
that would come eventually
i only thought about how sweet
your kisses and hugs were bound to be.

under the shade of the weeping willow
i felt your tender touch
i was truly in a fairy tale
my mind only knew that much.

three months later
you said goodbye
i was shocked and hurt, so i sat down,
under the weeping willow, and with her began to cry.

i saw a butterfly flutter by, ever so fast
and realized love was like that, it stays only for so long
when you least expect it
its out of your clutch and gone.

you gave me something though
that i will always hold dear
the ability to be able to dream
and in my dreams, nothing's cloudy, its all clear.

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

1 posted 2006-10-18 04:43 PM

The last stanza was beautiful. There were many good stanza's to this. Loved the last one. Nice write, not your best though. Parts of it did seem a bit off to me.

pip_man
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 70
Canada

2 posted 2006-10-18 04:52 PM

I really liked this one...and i am sure a lot of people can relate. Great write!

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace."
Jimi Hendrix

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

3 posted 2006-10-18 06:16 PM

thanks rhia=]
thanks pip_man=]

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2006-10-19 11:55 PM

i really liked this poem it was awesome it had a nice rhythmic flow...
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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