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PoetrySinger
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since 2006-10-16

Posts 54

0 posted 2006-10-18 01:26 PM

Forget and Remember
Forget the way he used to talk.
Forget the time that you once shared.
Forget the fact that he ever cared.
Remember now theres someone new.
Remember the way he used you.
Remember the girl whos heart got broke.
Remember hes nothing but a joke.

[This message has been edited by PoetrySinger (10-19-2006 10:27 AM).]

PoetrySinger
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since 2006-10-16

Posts 54

1 posted 2006-10-18 01:29 PM

this is what I do to remind myself that in the end there's only you

pip_man
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since 2006-07-15

Posts 70
Canada

2 posted 2006-10-18 03:14 PM

I liked it. I especially liked how you had forget at first and then remember, very interesting. The only thing I have to point out is that you wrote "Forget the way he used to talk" twice. I dont know if this was a amistake or not, but if it were me i would just put it once. Great write!

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace."
Jimi Hendrix

buttercupbaby
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since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

3 posted 2006-10-18 03:52 PM

hm, the thing that made me read this was "forget and remember" seemed like an interesting title..and it is really a great title, totally fit the write. you did put the first line twice, like pip_man said..i don't think you meant to do that..? but im not sure. I hope to read more from you! i really liked this, btw. i guess you're writing it about someone you care about, it seemed that way..well, nice write=]

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

4 posted 2006-10-18 04:23 PM

Its not remeber its remember

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

5 posted 2006-10-19 11:42 PM

Now this was the poem i have been waiting to read by you, it was amazing... i think we all can relate to this poem a little at least, and your poem; it had a nice flow, was the perfect length for me... good write i hope to read more from you soon...
hunnie*

p.s going into my library

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

6 posted 2006-10-22 02:49 AM

reminds me of my older style of writing...(not as its old like a bad thing i just write kinda different now) good write im adding this

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

7 posted 2006-10-22 02:50 AM

lol forgot to add it ha ha ha im a loooser

1 Timothy 4:12

aol sn- tearsoflove13762

Renegade
Junior Member

since 2006-10-21

Posts 22

8 posted 2006-10-22 05:07 PM

Great...
I loved how you used repitition and had really powerful lines

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