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idntcareifudntcare
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0 posted 2006-10-18 01:34 AM



This Thing
by: me...


Theres this thing.
It's about him.
who?
Well thats the thing.

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xxx

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rhia_5779
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1 posted 2006-10-18 09:34 AM


What? there is not enough here to judge it. There is no body to it. It needs more. I also didnt get it
idntcareifudntcare
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2 posted 2006-10-19 05:17 PM


Lol.. sori.. ITs this guy  I like and umm I dont really know him.. hehehe.. i guess its not very clear eh.. sorry...

xxx

hunnie_girl
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3 posted 2006-10-19 11:16 PM


yes, it was short; a little too much to know much about the piece. I think this could be made into something more if you added to poem, shared more ideas, feelings...
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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