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PoetrySinger
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since 2006-10-16

Posts 54

0 posted 2006-10-17 09:42 AM

Poetry is art
I play a part
Its a perfect tune
played by the moon
each word that is unspoken
its like a mis took notion
wavering in the air do I dare
say what I have heard
do I say it?
POETRY IS THE WORD

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

1 posted 2006-10-17 12:09 PM

The idea of the first lines was really strong. Then it faded. The ryming was forced to.

Challenging idea to write about, Poetry itself. Nice job with the challenge you took up.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-10-17 03:09 PM

I liked this one! It was kind of like a rap and rhia is right, it has an interesting idea. Welcome to passions btw! HAven't seen ya before

Thanks for sharing

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->---

tapper798
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since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

3 posted 2006-10-17 03:33 PM

Very interesting subject. Write a poem about poetry

I agree with the above, the rhyming became too forced after the first 2 lines. Keep it up, this is def. interesting!

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pip_man
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since 2006-07-15

Posts 70
Canada

4 posted 2006-10-17 03:56 PM

I liked it, and I agree it is an interesting topic. Hope to see more.

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace."
Jimi Hendrix

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

5 posted 2006-10-18 12:38 PM

i agree it kind of lost it's natural flow, but the prospect was spectacualar. i also have not seen you here so WELCOME TO PIP

... i hope to read more soon.

~poetry is art,
i play a part.~
wonderful beggining.

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

PoetrySinger
Member

since 2006-10-16

Posts 54

6 posted 2006-10-18 02:56 PM

Thanks for all your guys support keep the comments coming as I put new poetry on each day and by the way I write these just as I think them onto this website not before

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