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buttercupbaby
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since 2006-05-03
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outside in the rain

0 posted 2006-10-14 09:37 PM



I used to feel trusted, i used to feel loved
i used to think people loved me for me
now i dont know who i am
and i feel far from loved for whoever that might be.

my friends are lying to my face
not paying attention to what i feel
if they actually knew me really closely
they'd be able to tell im sad, they'd be able to see my ordeal.

im always the one giving advice
the one listening to y'all
the one y'all only call when you need something
never just to talk about going to do something, like the mall.

its like a one-sided friendship
is that actually possible?
maybe its just me, im not sure.
apparently it has to only happen to me, everyone else seems so joyful.

you're always complaining about some other friend
who only cares about what happens to her
talking about how she only listens when you listen to her
i wanna yell thats exactly whats happening with you and me, same freakin thing!

you say you're my best friend
but come on, you say that to everyone right?
you only wanna use me
cause you know ill fall into the trap, blinded by the light.

i dont know what to do though
im confused as anything already
i cant tell you i dont wanna be friends
that would just be mean, come on already...
ya i know this isn't my best, its basically a "conversation" with my..self..

~missy
My tears of love are a waste of time if I turn away..
my love is a waste of time
if you never stay

© Copyright 2006 Marisa F - All Rights Reserved
WaterFairy103
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since 2006-05-31
Posts 196

1 posted 2006-10-15 06:09 PM


I love this!  It makes you look at all the people you think you love, and who yout hink love you, and go 'Hmm...'.  Very well written, and I love the language.  Awesome!

Love,
WF103

When I stopped trying find the right guy, and concentrated on being the right girl, the right guy found me.

nick_lyss
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since 2006-08-21
Posts 88

2 posted 2006-10-15 08:53 PM


it does it makes look at all the people you think you love. im glad to read a new poem from you. it really good. keep up the good work.
hunnie_girl
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3 posted 2006-10-15 10:29 PM


i liked this poem, and acually i can relate to it too. the flow was a little off in some places though but overall it was good.
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
California
4 posted 2006-10-16 01:51 PM


I like the conversation Idea . But could you put some symbol so we know when its conversation and when its not. That got confusing.

That is such a true story! I can totally relate.

forever*wishing
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since 2006-05-29
Posts 178
where my heart is
5 posted 2006-10-20 02:03 AM


                  
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tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent
6 posted 2006-10-20 04:13 AM


i like the flow of this poem and its a good write all together. friends can be so cruel!
hope things get better thanks for sharing
Laura

1 Timothy 4:12

aol sn- tearsoflove13762

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