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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2006-10-11 11:28 PM


Emotionless heart,
something you had from the start,
how could you do this,
To me
well my attempt at a haiku sorta except for the end words because if i does make sense with those lines at the end i didn't think it would with out it i don't know i was kinda thinking poemish in class...
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A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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rhia_5779
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1 posted 2006-10-16 02:00 PM


I love the first two lines. The last line needs work though.

Nice, way better than I could ever to.

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2 posted 2006-10-18 12:04 PM


awe thanks rhia
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A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace   ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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