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lilhintofmocha
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since 2006-10-07

Posts 2
CA

0 posted 2006-10-08 04:46 PM

I tried to be pretty, but yet I failed

I tried to be happy, but I feel like I'm in jail

I tried to live, yet I feel I must die

I tried to smile, yet I cry

I tried to find love, but couldn't find any

I tried to be noticed but found ignorance a plenty

I tried to find a true friend, but none so far

I tried to heal my wounds, but was left with an emotional scar

I tried to tell you, just like I planned

I tried to tell you, but you wouldn't understand

XOXO,
Kaitlyn

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

1 posted 2006-10-08 04:52 PM

Outstanding first post. Welcome to pip!!!!

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-10-08 07:28 PM

Hi lilhintofmocha,

Welcome to the teen section of passions! It's nice to see a new face joining the ranks

I loved this poem and the ending was just amazing. At first I didn't know where this could go but what you did with the finish was awesome!

Thanks for sharing!

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->---

Kira Aso
Member

since 2006-09-26

Posts 351
Closer to Hell...

3 posted 2006-10-09 12:12 PM

I agree this is awesome!

(Where are my manners? Probably out the window...)
Welcome to Passions!

I really love this and I'm going to be putting it in my library!

I seriously hope you keep writing since you're first poem was so moving. I'll be keeping an eye out for you.

Hugs and Hershey bars!

~Kira

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

4 posted 2006-10-09 11:38 PM

nice first post and WELCOME TO PASSIONS will be looking for more of your poems...
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

The Shadow in Blue
Member

since 2006-05-18

Posts 493
EL, Michigan

5 posted 2006-10-10 06:52 AM

Ditto to what Stagal wrote. I loved it (flow-theme)

Welcome to Passions and continue posting.

^_^
~Jill

I'm taking my own chances to find truth between the lies.
Its kinda like just what it is.

http://www.myspace.com/theshedevil05

rebel~angel
Member

since 2006-06-20

Posts 71
Iowa USA

6 posted 2006-10-11 08:43 PM

Ooooh... I love this! Completely the story of my life right now! and yeah... welcome to PIP!

Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming.
-Elizabeth Haydon, Requiem for the Sun

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

7 posted 2006-10-12 04:38 PM

though maybe instead of Happy, Free?

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

8 posted 2006-10-13 11:39 PM

I liked this, and I hope to read more from you soon. Welcome to Passions!

~Alli~

rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

9 posted 2006-10-16 01:56 PM

How do you put this in your library?

pip_man
Member

since 2006-07-15

Posts 70
Canada

10 posted 2006-10-16 07:53 PM

Great frist post. Welcome to pi, hope you liek it. Hope to see more, great write!

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