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RevengeIsMine
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since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2006-10-06 06:05 AM


I have recently Posted in the other forums but i just thought i would check it out here...


Say A Little Prayer For Me

Our lord above the heavens,
I ask of you no more,
Except for one last final wish
Before you find me lifeless on the floor

The glass remains shattered,
I can’t stand to pick it up
The tears I have once shed of joy
Have now completely messed me up

Dear god, give me strength,
To fight away this pain
Give me courage to carry on
Because without it I’m insane

It hurts too much to breathe
Or to be looked straight in the eye
No longer can I hide away my pain
Because it’s eating me away inside

God, Carry me home
To the place where I am safe
And in the arms of an Angel may I find my eternal resting place.



© Copyright 2006 A Typical Aussie Chick - All Rights Reserved
Kira Aso
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since 2006-09-26
Posts 351
Closer to Hell...
1 posted 2006-10-07 09:47 AM


This was so full of emotion...very sad.
I haven't often seen a poem that I'm totally moved by.

It's going into my favorite's.

Lots of hugs and hershey bars for you!

~Kira

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
2 posted 2006-10-10 12:18 PM


"The glass remains shattered,
I can’t stand to pick it up
The tears I have once shed of joy
Have now completely messed me up
"

I like the imagery in the first two lines of this stanza, I think that these two lines add a lot to the entire poem.

The ending was very sad but beautiful also, in a ... different sort of beauty.

Thanks for sharing this piece, I hope to see more in the future


"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino            @-->---

Belinda
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since 2006-01-30
Posts 126
UK
3 posted 2008-04-19 07:09 PM


"The glass remains shattered,
I can’t stand to pick it up
The tears I have once shed of joy
Have now completely messed me up"

WOW. loved it, all of it, especially that stanza.

good to be back, missed your work

take care,
Belinda~*

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member
since 2006-07-08
Posts 820
Australia
4 posted 2008-04-20 06:59 AM


hey Bel.. You pulled this one from the Archives.. Its like almost a year old lol.. but nice to see how my writings changed.. lol.. nice to have you back
hiddensmiles
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since 2008-02-07
Posts 514
at the beach... i wish
5 posted 2008-04-20 06:28 PM


i love this to great job

JJ

fromme2U
Member
since 2007-11-09
Posts 257

6 posted 2008-04-20 06:35 PM


Great job! loved it
Earl Robertson
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since 2008-01-21
Posts 753
BC, Canada
7 posted 2008-04-20 06:41 PM


WOW amazing I felt this one! Library.

"Be Strong and Always Remember what made you you." Earl

"Ooo!!! Ooo!! I know! I know! um...he he" Earl
(Yes I am crazy)

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