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Teen Poetry #8

You Took My Heart

Bestroyal
New Member

since 2006-10-04

Posts 3

0 posted 2006-10-04 05:33 PM

You took my heart By : Bestroyal

You took my heart teared it in two
i thought i could trust but i cant
i thought you where by my side
when i needed you the most the
person who would help me when
i am down the person who would
brighten my day but i guess it is to
but it is to late now you took my
heart and ran away

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-10-04 05:52 PM

Hi Bestroyal,

Welcome to the teen section of passions! It's awesome to see a new face joining the crowd around here

I liked the poem, even if a little bit of it did confuse me. I liked how you were able to keep it on subject instead of wandering off into related issues but different, if that makes sense? What I'm saying is I like how you kept it sort of on the hurt of a betrayal.

Thanks for sharing, I hope to read more from you in the near future!

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->---

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