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Teen Poetry #8

You Hate Me

NCCXC86
Junior Member

since 2006-09-25

Posts 18
Michigan

0 posted 2006-10-03 12:50 PM

It doesn't matter anymore.
No more sweet love letters,
Washing up on my shore.
My hands tremble and shake.
They will never hold you again.
A nightmare from which I can't wake.
I ruined all that was good.
You just did what you had to,
You have the feelings anyone should:

You hate me.

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

1 posted 2006-10-03 03:30 AM

The last line in the poem does not make sense. The rest is ok. Good luck.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-10-03 09:24 AM

Umm, I actually think that the last line makes a lot of sense.

"It doesn't matter anymore.
No more sweet love letters,
Washing up on my shore." - I liked this part a lot, the imagery is very beautiful when you read it.

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino @-->---

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