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nick_lyss
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since 2006-08-21
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0 posted 2006-09-30 11:05 AM



Back then I showed how it felt to be free
Now all my anger is bottled inside of me
My anger flows through my body like water in a river
You broke my heart and now you have to feel a sense of
Regret everyday ,you cant even see the choice you made  that
Was so dumb, she walks around like she has a big stick up butt
And whenever you see her you, you go to her like a little dog trailing after her. When you were with I gave you freedom and so did you with me. Now I wish I didn’t because maybe you would
Still would be with me.



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stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
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1 posted 2006-09-30 12:06 PM


Hi nick_lyss,

Umm, it's interesting? Sounds kind of like a rant to me but I don't know... I wouldn't say this was my favorite by you but I did like this part, "When you were with I gave you freedom and so did you with me. Now I wish I didn’t because maybe you would
Still would be with me"
.

Thanks for sharing!

"I will love the light for it shows me the way, yet I will endure the darkness for it shows me the stars." - Og Mandino            @-->---

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