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Sarka
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since 2006-09-21
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0 posted 2006-09-27 12:10 PM



I've known you for so long
together we've been friends
my feelings for you are strong
They'll be there till the end

You've always been there for me
I've been there for you
Why can't I see
our feelings are true

You've told me of the way you feel
I would like to feel the same
I need time to heal
from all the past pain

If you're willing to wait
till my hurt is done
we'll be together by fate
and together we'll bask in the sun.

~If we didn't have any bad days, we wouldn't appreciate the good ones~

© Copyright 2006 Sarka - All Rights Reserved
Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2006-09-27 08:24 AM


Sarka~
I want to WELCOME you to PiP ..~

I sifted through your thoughts and found that, for me, the title could be 'Until The Hurt Is Done'

Don't know it that works for you, or not~
But ... it was buried there in your words~

Enjoyed the read~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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Kira Aso
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2 posted 2006-09-27 09:29 AM


This was a good poem! I agree with Marge on the title it sounds right somehow. Keep writing so I can keep reading!
hunnie_girl
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3 posted 2006-09-27 10:43 PM


yea this title seems to fit nicely... i liked this poem it had a nice story behind it too... i hope you can make the right decision of taking it further or just staying friends yet another good post by you...
hunnie*

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heart.

Sarka
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4 posted 2006-09-28 10:42 AM


thank you everyone for your input.  Marge thank you for the title it does fit.

~If we didn't have any bad days, we wouldn't appreciate the good ones~

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2006-09-28 06:58 PM


Sarka~
You are certainly welcome~

Just took a little plundering through your thoughts to find it~

Have a happy evening~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email -         noles1@totcon.com     

stargal
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6 posted 2006-09-28 07:05 PM


Hi Sarka,

I just wanted to add my welcome since I haven't seen you on pip before(I have been gone for awhile so that could be part of it...)

I do agree with Marge on the title, I think it would fit perfectly, but, of course, it is your poem and your choice.

Thanks for sharing it was an enjoyable read

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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pencil&paper
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7 posted 2006-09-28 08:45 PM


great poem
i agree it does have a good story behind it and i totally agree with the title it just.... works

"Those who danced were thought to be quite insane by those who could not hear the music."~Angela Monet

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