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wwzwlmd8
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0 posted 2006-09-24 01:54 AM


Love is easy to give and easy to get,
Love is a spcial thing and if you lose it you might regret,
Love is happiness and sadness,love is all around us,
Love can be given by famliy,firend's,and other's so give love to one another,pace.

[This message has been edited by wwzwlmd8 (09-24-2006 04:30 PM).]

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1 posted 2006-09-24 02:03 AM


wow i liked this it has potential but try shaping your poem like:

Love is easy to give and easy to get,
Love is a spcial thing and if you lose it you might regret,
Love is happiness and sadness,love is all around us,
Love can be given by famliy,friend's,and other's so give love to one another,
peace.

it's just a suggestion but i think it makes it a lot easier to read good poem...
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wwzwlmd8
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2 posted 2006-09-24 02:11 AM


Thank you for the tip.
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3 posted 2006-09-24 12:38 PM


yep...exactly that...
it makes it easier to read...


I enjoyed this

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4 posted 2006-09-24 06:32 PM


I enjoyed this one by you, I would just simply suggest checking your grammar and spelling before posting.  But, nice job!
Welcome to Pip!

~Alli~

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