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Mystical
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0 posted 2006-09-23 03:44 PM


The androgynous male
By: Mystical

Mystical, illicit sapphire eyed beauty
When I swam in the deep blue ocean
I was looking deeper within your eyes
When I was stroking your curly brown locks
Show me that you really meant a lot
When the thunder came down on earth I felt your fury
When I use run across the sandy beach
I was caressing and touching your skin
When the rain blanketed the earth I felt your pain
I knew you were holding me in your arms for comfort
Who am I use ask?
What am I?
I am the androgynous male

© Copyright 2006 Mystical - All Rights Reserved
nick_lyss
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1 posted 2006-09-23 05:04 PM


hi i think it was a good poem. i am a girl.
               courtney

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2 posted 2006-09-24 02:08 AM


i really liked this poem it was really beautiful i liked how it had a nice flow without rhyming it was really from the heart good post hope to read more...
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3 posted 2006-09-24 06:26 PM


Woah, I really liked this.  I especially love how descriptive you were in the first few lines.  Great job!

~Alli~

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