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Sarka
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since 2006-09-21
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Canada

0 posted 2006-09-21 11:19 PM



I used to believe in Love at first sight
when you'd wish and pray about him all night

I used to believe do unto others as you'd have done unto you
but now I see their intensions are untrue

I used to believe in so many things
but now all I want is a pair of wings

These wings that I'd have would take me away
to a place of peace where I could pray

I'd pray for all of us, good and bad
I'd pray for no one to ever feel sad

But for now I'll sit here alone and dwell
and continue my life in a living hell.

~If we didn't have any bad days, we wouldn't appreciate the good ones~

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Sarka
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since 2006-09-21
Posts 23
Canada
1 posted 2006-09-22 12:41 PM


this is my first post so read and i hope you enjoy it
hunnie_girl
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2 posted 2006-09-22 12:53 PM


But for now I'll sit here alone and dwell
and continue my life in a living hell.

that absolutly did a wonderful job as an end to the poem, i really loved this stanza.

and now let me welcome you to pip   i hope you enjoy it here at passions reading and writing poetry... also i thought this was a great poem for your first post... i'll be looking to read more poetry from you...
hunnie*

krazy 4 her
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since 2006-09-14
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Your parent's front porch
3 posted 2006-09-22 12:27 PM


Once again, good job. I like this better than the other one I think. Hope to see more soon.
rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334
California
4 posted 2006-09-22 04:43 PM


scary.. i just went on a scool trip and things went out of hand and that poem, i thought it wa sme like literally cause that is exactly how i feel rite now.

beautiful

wwzwlmd8
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since 2006-09-23
Posts 96
San Diego,CA
5 posted 2006-09-24 02:09 AM


Outstanding job you did great LOVED IT.
*Alli4000*
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6 posted 2006-09-24 06:27 PM


Excellent write, I hope to see more poems from you soon!
Welcome to Pip!

~Alli~

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