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rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
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0 posted 2006-09-18 04:51 PM



Stand by me and take my hand
Walk with me, to take the last stand
Trust me and believe,
Please, listen to me

Put your faith in me, right now
I promise together we will not go down
Stand true, be at my side
Face any foes, no hide

My friend,
To the end
What would I do?
without you

I promise you my friendship, I promise you my aid
If you need help I will be there, I will take your pain
I will keep your secrets, be there for you during low and high
Dry your tears, listen to your hurts, and about you never say a lie

Friend, step over the crisscrossed line
Ignore the shadows, meet the light
To you forever loyal, on me you can depend
Just give me a call, doesn’t matter when

Defend you with conviction
Jump to meet your expectations
When ever you need to cry
Soothing you, right at your side

You are always there for me
Time to do the same
Looking at you, a friend I see
Friends are no game

You mean more than you will ever know
It would kill me to ever just let go
With you I know I am not alone
Thanks, for hearing all my moans

Without a doubt, if you have trouble, let me help
Who dares mess with my friend, they’ll get hell
I will fight for you till the end
For you are true, a great friend


who cares how many miles apart?
you are forever in my heart
No lie it is true
I love You


A friend
Thru the end
Forever we will be
Close you and me

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krazy 4 her
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since 2006-09-14
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Your parent's front porch
1 posted 2006-09-18 05:18 PM


No offense but this seems like a bit of a play off of my poem, 'Lean On Me'. I like it and all, but it seems a bit too influenced.
rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
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2 posted 2006-09-19 09:01 AM


it wasnt from ur poem, i wrote about my best friends who are back  in the states, and i cant contact rite now cause they are on a school trip, and i wanted to tell them how much i cared, and i was missing them alot, about half of the poem i had written before, that i didnt post. the other half i wrote like two or three days ago i think, with one addition to the the poem and minor editing changing of words last nite.

it wasnt put together complete till last nite.

ur poem didnt really influence me, it made me all sad though cause i miss everyone back home.

krazy 4 her
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Your parent's front porch
3 posted 2006-09-19 11:43 AM


Sorry, I guess I was just being paranoid!!!
hunnie_girl
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4 posted 2006-09-19 01:01 PM


yea i liked that but darn i though the poem was about me:P haha kidding and Krazy don't be paranoid everyone develops their own style of writing i didn't even relate this poem to your yea i guess same meaning but differently put together they are both well written poems ... but you guys they do have one fault... they aren't about me haha kidding haha. good post rhia i liked it a lot of emotion ...
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

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5 posted 2006-09-19 07:01 PM


"Friend, step over the crisscrossed line
Ignore the shadows, meet the light
To you forever loyal, on me you can depend
Just give me a call, doesn’t matter when"


That stanza was my favorite!  This is definately one of those friendship type poems I always love reading.  Nice job!

~Alli~

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