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rhia_5779
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since 2006-06-09
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0 posted 2006-09-16 06:10 PM



A lone figure runs
Down empty corridors
Haggard steps ring out loud
Breath coming out in gasps

Dark unlit shadows
Are her domain
Dressed in silver
The only lightness in a sea of dark

Running from all of being
Going towards destiny
Foot catches on an upturned stone
Bites her lip in a frozen cry

Not allowed to make noise
In her untouched realms
Her body falls on the cold floor
She gets up in a slowness of motion

To run again down the aisles of dark
She runs always running down Empty corridors
Looking for a sign of other existence
Though knowing there will be none

Shadows, darkness, home of the forgotten
A space in which she is
Where all the lost souls come home
To forever run the empty corridors

Running never to stop
Knowing what her fate is
Too far gone in what used to be a fable
She immersed herself in her own lies
  To be trapped in empty corridors.


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sorry this is probaly not that good. looking over it i dont think its that good. it just came i just wrote it. but please tell me how i can do better i want to really try to get better

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nostalgic*pride
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since 2006-08-23
Posts 122
NowhereVille
1 posted 2006-09-16 06:36 PM


No no no no, I like this poem. I think the ending is very mysterious, where not too much is given away, but you know what the emotions must be like. Really, I like it.
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