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krazy 4 her
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since 2006-09-14
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Your parent's front porch

0 posted 2006-09-15 10:59 AM


I watch her from the outside
As she cries her silent tears
I hold her close beside me
As she lets go of all her fears
They treat her like a curse
That needs to die
Maybe they would rethink it
If they saw her through my eyes

My angel
Beauty and charm
My angel
I'll let no harm
Come to you
Sweet angel

I whsiper words of comfort
As she slowly falls asleep
I keep watch over my girl
As she becomes so weak
Cause they're killing her
She won't make it very far
I lean in and whisper
'They just don't see how gorgeous you are'

My angel
Beauty and charm
My angel
I'll let no harm
Come to you
Sweet angel

~~~This was written, and it was supposed to be a song, but I had nothing else to go on so I called it a poem. Haley (Nostalgic*Pride) was sort of my editor for the whole thing, and Kiara (decietful_siren)... well, she laughed at me already. =)~~~

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nostalgic*pride
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since 2006-08-23
Posts 122
NowhereVille
1 posted 2006-09-15 12:31 PM


Wow, I remember this poem. We did this like, a year ago when the band was first starting out. And you kept trying to play guitar to it and nothing worked. And then, it took me two hours to make you accept you had written a poem. Lol, good times. I liked it then, and I like it now. Though you never would tell me who it was about. Care to tell now? (Probably not, but a girl can dream...)
deceitful_siren
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since 2006-09-14
Posts 20
USA
2 posted 2006-09-15 02:58 PM


Poor, poor oblivious sister. He's refering to you of course. I don't understand why the two of you don't start going out already, and move off to get married in Vegas. Lol.

Beyond that little factoid, I- it also pains me to say- enjoyed reading this. Hmph, that'll be the first and last time no doubt you'll hear me say it. I do think it's a bit choppy in some places though, so HA!

buttercupbaby
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since 2006-05-03
Posts 400
outside in the rain
3 posted 2006-09-15 07:37 PM


i don't exactly know what in the world is going on with what y'all are saying[lol..actually,i know exactly what y'all mean and are saying, but im going to act like i dont..] and move on to say, Krazy, great job. i absolutely loved this poem..its wonderful!
*Alli4000*
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4 posted 2006-09-15 07:41 PM


Wonderful poem! So delightful to read, and I'm sure the girl you wrote it to must be someone very special.
Keep sharing and welcome to Pip!

~Alli~

bekahlekah45
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since 2006-03-14
Posts 533

5 posted 2006-09-15 08:56 PM


awwww awesome!  this is cuuute! : )
hunnie_girl
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6 posted 2006-09-15 09:28 PM


wow i have to admit i really liked that:P this person your talking about seems like you like her and therefor should go out with:P hope eveything works out for the best... hope to see more poems by you but who know maybe when you are trying to write a poem you might acually get a song out of it:P good post oh and by the way WELCOME TO PIP ...
hunnie*

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stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
7 posted 2006-09-15 09:35 PM


Hi hi krazy 4 her!

I'ma start tearing you down and breakin' your heard and laughing in your face, right... now!

Nah, just kidding, I'ma be nice... for now, although you weren't! You wanted to brain wash me... but I showed you! mwhahaha!

Oooooooooook! Welcome to passions, nice to see another one of those from the crazy clan of pride and siren

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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in_luv_06
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since 2006-09-30
Posts 9

8 posted 2006-09-30 02:47 PM


like all the other poems i've read today... i LUV this poem.lol. i hope the dude i luv feels that way bout me.....
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