Teen Poetry #8 |
Mom, How Dare You |
nostalgic*pride Member
since 2006-08-23
Posts 122NowhereVille |
I can't believe you would say that That I'm the reason for your pain The reason you can't keep a job And our ceiling leaks when it rains How dare you entertain that it was my fault That every boyfriend's a jerk After all we've suffered through Trying to make this work Well, screw that, Mom I was the one that gave you a hand When everyone else walked away I at least tried to understand Oh, Hell no, I am NOTHING like my father The man walked away when things got tough I've been here all along Without me, you'd be jack oughta luck Yeah, your parents hate you None of your brothers care But haven't you noticed That I've always been there So just think about this As you dish your next blow We both felt the same pain But I was left alone |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
one of my fav. writes by you i think. very amazing. alot of emotion it it. sounded very true. cant think of any praise worthy of ur poem,its sooo goood |
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loveislove Member
since 2006-06-25
Posts 59USA |
wow it is really good, it seems very emotional, very thoughtful. I personally loved it, and the meaning behind it. bravo then theres the moment of silence, the eye of the storm, when the whole world collapses, i want to be in your arms |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
this is really good. really intense- like really good. if this actually goes on then i'm sooo sorry. t hat would suck so badly. as for this poem though, I thought the flow was really good, the emotion was deep and amazing, and the form was awesome. good job! |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Omgosh! Talk about an intense read! I hope this isn't happening to you for real... I liked the emotions in this poem a lot; The feeling of outrage and sadness was a strong influence in how much I liked the poem. "We both felt the same pain But I was left alone" My favorite part^^ It takes a minute to comprehend what you are saying, but after you think about it, it makes sense, it's true. I just loved how you phrased it like that. Thanks for sharing this poem! "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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nostalgic*pride Member
since 2006-08-23
Posts 122NowhereVille |
Ha, I had to rewrite this poem a trillion and a half times because of all the cursing in the original one. And, as to all of your, "I hope this isn't really going on"s... well, it sorta is. Just dramatized. Thanks to all of you. stargal, you always leave awesome comments, you rock. |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
wow it sux but i can acually relate to this i loved this very emotional write... another fav for me... luv from hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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deceitful_siren Junior Member
since 2006-09-14
Posts 20USA |
*Gets offended at last part* Not true. Poser. Besides that, I liked this. Yet another reason that you are cooler than me. HA, AS IF!! Lol... |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Oh, wow, very emotional poem you've written here. The poem itself is very well written, I'm just sorry to hear that this is happening to you in real life, even if it isn't as bad as you've written it. If you ever need anyone to talk to, let me know. ~Alli~ |
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