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buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

0 posted 2006-09-13 02:42 PM

I just want to die
so all this pain will go away
i don't want to be here any more
i just don't want to stay
i just want to forget you
and all the pain you brought
because it hurts to much
my weakness you sought
i just want to go away
to another world, another me
somewhere were i'm happy
thats were i want to be
somewhere with out pain
worry or hurt
somewhere new
were i can forget your worth
but no one will let me go
so i'm doomed to this place
so i will try to make the best of it
but my heart,never again, will anyone find a trace

nostalgic*pride
Member

since 2006-08-23

Posts 122
NowhereVille

1 posted 2006-09-13 02:45 PM

Hmm, this poem actualy made me think. Which most poems don't. I really liked that, great job.

nick_lyss
Member

since 2006-08-21

Posts 88

2 posted 2006-09-13 03:23 PM

i like this poem it does make you think. good job

rhia_5779
Senior Member

since 2006-06-09

Posts 1334
California

3 posted 2006-09-13 03:44 PM

i liked it it did make me think. but um probbaly not one of your best sorry. it was good but the flow was a little off. it seemed almost choppy in bits like the words didnt go.
it was interesting. and sad.

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

4 posted 2006-09-13 04:35 PM

thanks for the replies y'all.
rhia, i didn't think it had great flow either..i really haven't been in a poem writing mood lately..or, i have but they haven't been good! sorry.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

5 posted 2006-09-19 01:08 PM

i agree it made me think... i hope you are feeling better soon... i know what you need you need cookies... but if you even need to vent i'm here for you

...
best wishes,
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

6 posted 2006-09-20 09:51 PM

aw thanks hunnie=)
and ya, i think im pretty much venting on everyone around me, you really wouldn't wanna let me vent on you too=)
lol. thanks again

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

7 posted 2006-10-08 12:37 PM

awe i don't mind if you needed to vent, everyone needs to vent once in awhile... i hope you're feeling better soon...
hunnie*

A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~

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