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nick_lyss Member
since 2006-08-21
Posts 88 |
only 17 People tell that you aren’t for me but why is it I cant stop thinking about you. They tell me not to talk to you but its so hard not to . It feels so right. I know what makes me happy and you are the one that i want . People tell me that I am too young but I love you. I thought I learnt my lesson to not get so hung up on you but my emotions got the best of. No one cant change my mind. I know I am only 17 but I love you . I Thought I was my ex but when kept seeing him I fell in love with him again.yesterday he told me that he still loves me, he still with this other girl he told me that he cant stand her anymore but she knew thats how she was she would of been still with me. right now we are still friends, he said he wants to be more than just friends but I am still afraid of getting hurt again.i really am so confused. I Think i missed up on the poem.let me know |
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rhia_5779 Senior Member
since 2006-06-09
Posts 1334California |
It needs organization first of all, and to be in lines and punctuation. |
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*wishfull*thinking* Junior Member
since 2006-09-03
Posts 33north east of england |
yea rhia's right i know how you feel in a way as i'm in your current posistion lol but anyway the poem was really good but it does need a bit of improvemnet lol dani x I'm miles from where you are, |
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nick_lyss Member
since 2006-08-21
Posts 88 |
im gonna redo it so its alot better. i need alot of organization. i will try again |
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whitelielovely Member
since 2006-12-11
Posts 146Australia |
isn't that all we can do? try again? well i'm sure it will be wonderful darling. W.L. Lovely |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
yeap i can't wait  hunnie  ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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