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hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

0 posted 2006-09-12 12:22 PM

i saw you today,
with your new girl,
i didn't wait around,
it's not polite to stare,

you see what i passed up?
but would it have lasted?
we are too different,
in different worlds,

the sun rises at your house,
different than at mine,
your social status begs to differ,
and the sun doens't always shine,

it's not everyday that you find your true match,
and you two seem so good together,
so leave me out of the picture,
because i would have been your suicidal lover.
~please don't ask me to xplain cuz i don't really understand it either now that i'm rereading it i don't like it either but i typed it all out so i'm gonna post it anyway:P

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

nostalgic*pride
Member

since 2006-08-23

Posts 122
NowhereVille

1 posted 2006-09-12 08:54 AM

"it's not everyday that you find your true match,
and you two seem so good together,
so leave me out of the picture,
because i would have been your suicidal lover."

I LOVED this part of the poem. I really think you did a good job. Not your BEST, but everything by you is always fantastic.

hunnie_girl

Member Elite

since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
Canada

2 posted 2006-09-14 12:52 PM

ohhhhhhhhh thanks you are my favorite replyer:P

and oops i'm sorry i didn't realize that it had the same title as your poem sry :$ ummm but yea thanks again

luv from hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-09-14 01:53 PM

I think, in my own sense, I understand where you are coming from. It doesn’t seem like a sarcastic/hurt poem but something wishing an ex well with their life. Happy that they’ve moved on and are doing well, I could be wrong but that’s how I like to see it…

"the sun rises at your house,
different than at mine,
your social status begs to differ,
and the sun doens't always shine,"

My favorite part^^
How it talks about social status, it just seems to grab me, cause I can relate to that...

Thanks for sharing Hunnie, it's been enjoyable

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2006-09-14 06:12 PM

"the sun rises at your house,
different than at mine,
your social status begs to differ,
and the sun doens't always shine,"

This was also my favorite part as well. The whole metaphor of the sun rising differently for the two of you.

I think you did a nice job with this, definately worth the read. Keep it up!

~Alli~

Belinda
Member

since 2006-01-30

Posts 126
UK

5 posted 2008-04-19 07:06 PM

this realtes ridiculously so to what i'm going through at the moment.

great write, i'm extremley impressed.

good to be back by the way, i've missed your work

Belinda~*

Expect nothing, Prepare for anything.

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