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hunnie_girl
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0 posted 2006-09-12 12:06 PM


i don't know how i fell into your charm,
my heart must have avoided the alarm,
although you do me no good you do me no harm,

by the end of today you found your girl,
yoo swore to me she made your world twirl,
i smiled weakly and said, "hell, give it a whirl."

if i lived a thousand miles closer to you,
loving me would be easier to do,
but it'd all end too soon, something i already knew,

i don't know how i'd give you up,
you looked at me and said, "tough luck."
i fell out of love with you one night,
and how you asked it was some sight,
i smiled when i answered one reply,
it just happened said I

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

© Copyright 2006 Krysti - All Rights Reserved
nostalgic*pride
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1 posted 2006-09-12 08:57 AM


Hmm, this confuses me a little. I like it, but I'm not really sure what it's about. Care to elaborate?
loveislove
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2 posted 2006-09-12 04:34 PM


im with the other dude on this one, it is a little bit confusing and seems to have no point, but maybe there is and im just not getting it, either way, its a relatively good poem but i dont particularly care for the way you have only three rhymes but i suppose im just a person who prefers and even number for rhyming poetry but still good...

then theres the moment of silence, the eye of the storm, when the whole world collapses, i want to be in your arms

hunnie_girl
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3 posted 2006-09-14 12:44 PM


hmmm well it's kinda about this guy i used to like then he just wanted to be friends b/c we lived a long way from eachother. and well he kinda tells me about all his relationships and it used to bother me then i guess i just moved on... not one of my favorite poems either:P but tx for replying ...
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

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4 posted 2006-09-14 06:11 PM


Too bad your long-distance relationship wasn't able to work out.
Well, although this poem wasn't one of my favorites by you, I'm glad you shared it! Keep it up!

~Alli~

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5 posted 2007-05-24 04:25 PM


=]loved it.

Becca.

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