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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2006-09-06 09:57 PM



How is it that you find a way,
to capture my heart every time,
I fight with everything I have,
I tell myself I'll never cross that line.

I look at you and I'm lost inside,
my mind doesn't know what emotoins to feel,
I'm tired of fooling myself
I don't want to misread what isn't real.

But your smile tells me that I'm ok
and I'm sure that you're all I need,
You somehow warp my mind into believing
every single way that you lead.

Your words and your songs carry me,
and they help me through the day.
Even when you're not around
You're with me in every way.

I write such broken rhymes when you
cause me to fall from a shattered heart,
I always vow to myself that I'll never
let you see me in the times I fall apart.

I realize too late that I already fell,
and somehow I'm back here again,
How is it that I fall for the one person,
who I know I will never win?

So how did I end up here again,
when it's happended so many times?
Why is it that my own heart always
follows someone who's not even mine?

-Erin

AIM-beatufu1tragidy

Tell me what you think about being open, about being honest with yourself.

© Copyright 2006 Erin - All Rights Reserved
Nikerlz
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since 2006-08-31
Posts 37
California
1 posted 2006-09-06 10:21 PM


Beautiful writting such as this needs more comments!  You have talent!

BK

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
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2 posted 2006-09-06 11:00 PM



"How is it that you find a way,
to capture my heart every time,
I fight with everything I have,
I tell myself I'll never cross that line"


Wow... So beautiful yet so sad! This stanza, this whole poem, really gets the emotions across to the reader. I loved this poem, it's one of my favorites of yours.

Thanks for sharing!

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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pip_man
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since 2006-07-15
Posts 70
Canada
3 posted 2006-09-09 09:44 PM


Ya i definitally agree that you have talent...and this is an amazing poem. I can relate to it and i loved reading it...cant wait to read another of your poems.
*Alli4000*
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4 posted 2006-09-10 11:24 PM


Another great write! I loved the first stanza.

~Alli~

hunnie_girl
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5 posted 2006-09-19 01:16 PM


So how did I end up here again,
when it's happended so many times?
Why is it that my own heart always
follows someone who's not even mine?

wow this poem really had a nice flow  and this was my fav stanza
hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

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