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i thought you cared
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nick_lyss Member
since 2006-08-21
Posts 88 |
i thought you cared. you told me that you cared but i guess it was just a lie.when i told you that i loved you, you told me the same. we grew up together. you saw tears in my eyes because of the lies you the lies you told me while i cry my love for you slowly dies for you. i don't know why i cried for you, you aren't worth it.but for some reason i did. I'm not like you. I was true. I never lied to you. I don'T need you anymore and I don't want you anymore. Don't you feel like crap now. so now my heart can finally heal now. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Mmm... It was kind of sad but enjoyable. More power to you for dumping him!  "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
stargal how do you know for sure if she dumped him of he dumped her... or do you all know and i'm missing out... but anyways good post... hunnie* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
oooh! Good point hunnie_girl, I guess I was just... guessing from what this line said, "I don'T need you anymore and I don't want you anymore. ", so I guess you are right, I don't really know. It just seemed to fit? lol "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
aw, i loved this=) it was a really good write by you, and im sorry, whether he dumped you, or YOU dumped him anyway, keep posting! HOPE TO HEAR FROM YOU SOON=) HOW HAVE YOU BEEN? |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
If this boy has caused you this much pain, then it's good that he's out of your life and you're trying to move on. Nice write!  ~Alli~ |
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Shaddow1 Junior Member
since 2006-09-04
Posts 41Kingman Az, USA |
Well it certianly shows your emotion's. And you got your point across. But the way you wrote it made it hard to tell were you pause and where you may have wanted ypur feeling's to stand out more. You also might want to reread it and fix they way you word things because it was a little hard to understand in a few places. Don't get me wrong you so great potential.I injoyed you writing very much. Those are just some tips to help you along the way. And feel free to read and help me with mine. I am always willing to become better :P GOOD WORK! Love is like a Rose; it always dies - Britney Miller |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
no i meen how do you know it a girl that wrote this poem not a guy that wrote this poem... unless you all know something i don't:P A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Uhh... Now that you mention it I'm not sure why I said she instead of he, cause, I don't really know. I was assuming again? Yet, I think I did know, but now I can't think of how I knew what I knew... I said it just cause I could? :P "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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nick_lyss Member
since 2006-08-21
Posts 88 |
i am a girl my name is courtney i wrote i thought you cared |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
okaie at least we know not hope to read more of your poems hunnie* A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
oops i just realized i wrote not instead of now oops. hunnie* A time to love, and a time to hate; a time of war and a time for peace ~Ecclesiastes 3:8~ |
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