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my fault |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
i spent all this time blaming everyone else, i should have looked deeper and blamed myself, i got what i had coming, although the realization is numbing, why couldn't i see, it wasn't them it was me, it's my fault for all the pain, that's reclessly driving me insane, it's my fault for all the fighting, they all know it though it's not in writing, it's my fault for all the hate, is my admitting it too late? so blame me for ruining your life, the blame is stabbing me like a knife, i spent all this time blaming everyone else, now looking deeper i hate myself A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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Nikerlz Junior Member
since 2006-08-31
Posts 37California |
One of the hardest things to do in life is admitting your wrong. I enjoyed this very much. BK |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I love the last stanza the most.. it was good but don't ever hate yourself.. no matter what.. great write.. ~heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
"i spent all this time blaming everyone else, i should have looked deeper and blamed myself" Wow, I loved this part a lot! Actually, I loved the whole poem, the willingness to admit wrong instead of trying to pass the blame on, amazing^^ I also liked the flow a lot; the flow in this seemed to fit the whole poem just right;it was wonderful to read. Thanks for sharing!  PS - You have one spellling error as far as I can see^^ I believe it is supposed to be recklessly, but I'm not sure... lolz "I pray thee, O God, that I |
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lovergurl Member
since 2007-05-08
Posts 59va |
I love it. =D Becca. |
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buttercupbaby Member
since 2006-05-03
Posts 400outside in the rain |
I loved this poem, it kinda went along with the "topic/clincher" rule in my writing class.. Because you started off saying, "i spent all this time blaming everyone else, i should have looked deeper and blamed myself," and then, fore-shadowed your ending.., "i spent all this time blaming everyone else, now looking deeper i hate myself" EXCELLENT!! although, you shouldnt hate yourself, you are a terribly wonderful person :] ~missy |
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surf_painter Member
since 2007-04-10
Posts 434Canada |
this is great it takes a strong person to admit that it was their fault or that they were wrong but you should never hate yourself this was a great poem i loved it |
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rebel~angel Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 71Iowa USA |
Absolutely amazing how well this fits my life...and how I am finding it impossible to say what you just did... Remember:Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming. |
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Clockwork_Orange Senior Member
since 2007-03-23
Posts 620Space Camp, IN |
so deliciously great! i loved this piece because i could not only relate and say that i have been there before, but i can also feel your emotions played out in the piece in every little cuplet. c'est tres bonne et j'adore tu écriture |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
Wow thank you all I haven't seen this post for a long time:P ahh thanks for the little french CO... very much appreciated you all. hunnie. ~fool me once shame on you, fool me twice shame on me~ |
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