When Words Are Lost(working title)

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Teen Poetry #8

When Words Are Lost(working title)

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

0 posted 2006-09-02 10:58 AM

Spellbound speechless
high speed breakdown
    found alone
face down in self regret
spun in a tornado of misdeeds
   wishing to change just one moment
Tracing shadows    that are faded
trying to hold on to an insubstantial
         nothing
Wishing wasting away
   was a figment of bizarre imagination
Spellbound speechless

" Everytime he held you close, yea were you thinking of me..." Stab My Back-All American Rejects

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-09-02 05:44 PM

Hi Kaos,

How nice to read one of your poems again!

"Spellbound speechless
high speed breakdown
found alone
face down in self regret
spun in a tornado of misdeeds",

My favorite part^^ It is a strong beginning to this poem that is nice to see, since, a lot of poems start out weak and make me not want to finish reading them... Wow.. That sounds arrogant! lolz

Anyways, thanks for sharing this piece; I found it to be a very enjoyable read and I hope to see more like it in the near future

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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Shaddow1
Junior Member

since 2006-09-04

Posts 41
Kingman Az, USA

2 posted 2006-09-04 03:02 PM

Very nice poem, it is short but it gets the point across in a very powerful way. The only way I can discribe you style of writing is like a tornado lol. Your words seem to be a mess and every wear yet it all holds together. I am not sure if you understand what I mean but I assure you it is nothing bad. Nice work and i hope to read more of your poetry.

Love is like a Rose; it always dies - Britney Miller

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

3 posted 2006-09-04 05:47 PM

Completely agree with all above comments, but do want to add, Nice picture (nothing to do with ur poem i know) Uhm, haven't read any of your stuff before, but this is nice... really enjoyed reading it, and am looking forward to reading more...

Much love,
Michelle

*I love him oh yes I do, he's for me and not for you, and if by chance you take my place, I'll take my fist and smash your face!*

nostalgic*pride
Member

since 2006-08-23

Posts 122
NowhereVille

4 posted 2006-09-25 12:43 PM

"Tracing shadows that are faded
trying to hold on to an insubstantial
nothing"

Ya, I know this is old. But I really loved this line. It rocks. Keep up the awesome work.

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