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nostalgic*pride
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0 posted 2006-09-01 05:36 PM


In a world of modern day clichés
And lies from every mouth
It makes you wonder exactly
What this life is all about

With broken hearts and mad disease
And hatred around every bend
It’s hard not to sometimes wish
That your life would end

So why are we all here
What is the meaning to life
It couldn’t possibly be all the drama
Or the endless flow of strife

Love could be the answer
But often many die alone
Family might be the reason to live
But so few wish to go home

Come with me, beyond the veil
As I journey to my death
Because this life matters naught at all
It is merely the very first step


*Cough, cough* Worst poem I've written yet. You don't have to tell me.

© Copyright 2006 Haley May - All Rights Reserved
*Alli4000*
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1 posted 2006-09-01 09:50 PM


No! I don't think it's bad, I actually relate to it and I'm sure so do many other people.  Everyone tends to wonder what "the meaning of life is" and what purpose we have here.
Anyhow, I really enjoyed reading this. Keep posting!

~Alli~

stargal
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2 posted 2006-09-03 01:04 AM


Well... I think alli said it best so all I want to do is agree with everything she said. In trying to express it in my own words how much I liked/related to this poem it would sound horrible...

I did like this one a lot though

"I pray thee, O God, that I
may be beautiful within."
–Socrates
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pencil&paper
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3 posted 2006-09-10 05:01 PM


i totally agree with both stargal and *Alli4000*
and i just want to say i really enjoyed this poem

hunnie_girl
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4 posted 2006-09-14 11:03 PM


wow that was awesome and i don't think you have had a worst poem good write i'm not suposed to be on here so toodles
luv from hunnie*

A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your
heart.

rhia_5779
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5 posted 2006-09-15 10:27 AM


that was soooo good
krazy 4 her
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6 posted 2006-09-15 11:01 AM


Hmm, I like this one a lot. I don't think it's bad at all. I agree with the others that tons of people would be able to relate to this. Good job.
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