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The will to live - part 1

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Honeybunch
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0 posted 06-07-2009 02:04 PM       View Profile for Honeybunch   Email Honeybunch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Honeybunch's Home Page   View IP for Honeybunch

The brain shuts down when pain decides
to squeeze like a steel vice
and draw each drop of happiness
from one imprisoned so.

And with each drop the will to live
is lost and wanders far
until in sleep the mind shouts out
“Come, please come home”
but the will now free uncertain
stands immobile for a while.

In this stance it thinks to be
a carefree travelling gypsy
and enjoy the forest greenery
until called to other pastures
but too it knows that home’s a place
where its peculiarities
are welcomed and adored.

Like love it thinks until sunrise
and waits for the sunset
to form within the way to go
but always in the ears
the mind’s so plaintiff cry
echo’s and re-echo’s
throughout the duration.

The will to live; how far it roams
when pain decides to hold
and I, the scribe, wait patiently
to document part 2.

Helen / 7 June 2009

[This message has been edited by Honeybunch (06-07-2009 11:41 PM).]

© Copyright 2009 Helen - All Rights Reserved
TinaTrivett
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1 posted 06-07-2009 03:18 PM       View Profile for TinaTrivett   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for TinaTrivett

Helen...this a beautiful write.
Honeybunch
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2 posted 06-07-2009 03:38 PM       View Profile for Honeybunch   Email Honeybunch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Honeybunch's Home Page   View IP for Honeybunch

Thank you, Tina.  The inspiration for it isn't "beautiful" but I'm sure it will lead to appreciation down the line.

Helen
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3 posted 06-07-2009 07:54 PM       View Profile for kindredspirit   Email kindredspirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kindredspirit

you have woven a haunting, lovely poem.
Robert E. Jordan
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4 posted 06-07-2009 09:03 PM       View Profile for Robert E. Jordan   Email Robert E. Jordan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Robert E. Jordan

Yo dear Helen,

Your poem leaves me speechless.  I can't even think about it.

Love Bobby
LindsayP
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5 posted 06-07-2009 09:22 PM       View Profile for LindsayP   Email LindsayP   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LindsayP


Yes great write dear Helen, a lot of

thought went into that one, enjoyed.
love.

Lindsay
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This one left me silent....
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The will to live; how far it roams
when pain decides to hold
and I, the scribe, wait patiently
to document part 2 unfold.

I enjoyed your poem Helen, a most thought provking one as well. I hope you like the word I added. love

Lindsay

Marchmadness
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8 posted 06-13-2009 12:05 AM       View Profile for Marchmadness   Email Marchmadness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marchmadness

Profound thoughts, Helen. Much to think about.
                                Ida
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