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RedStoneEB
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0 posted 2009-06-05 02:37 PM



As the dawn is; dew against the lips
while rain pushes through its form--
roses lighten, crisp red to be consumed
in touch; feeling the pressure of droplets,
sinking low towards the ground in a gentle bow--
oh tearful roses I understand your burden and watch
leant on a window-sill as you let it go.

Thinking with intoxication those fond thoughts
overlooked, shredded through the murmured voice--
hid in the layers where soft silk and paper calmly
compare—easily torn.

The water has ran from your petal-tips
out late into the night—not lost but framed in
icicles adapted by this cold that has waited and
waits for loss and losses.

At the bottom of the mind metaphorical as a brother
to shadow—wanting to be noticed--blackened,
when the lantern finally comes to rest near its side.

Tucked into the flesh are these sensors that delight in light
strokes, and the soft air blown from lips—beneath these
an unarmed dormant expression; mourning innocence--
misery, bitterness, sinister.

Ancestral.

Weak minds and strong legs—isolation to the overture of
speech, must this mean the spirit is vile when it acts in
gestures, and actions of repression?

As curiosity allows the person to wander off in the fields;
to admire the little inanimate details of grass swaying by
the gentle nudge of wind.

And seeing no-one come, allowing flowers to be flowers,
and self ideals and ideas to eclipse that of influence--
for there is none when the familiar scenes are strayed
away in another form by another person.

How it is that flesh is fragile—as differings push against
each other, an insects wings fluttering so fast as the hearts
Beating comes close to its comparison.

Slightly punishing itself with each flutter—as the tips rub
and the long quiet—is softly turned away from silence.

Revealing a flaw within the ideas of what it is to be felled,
fallen, gone in the ways of love; a star-gaze not upwards but
inwards—out there where imagination has to make the rest
of the journey for that trembling of deepness to occur,
looking at the dreamed written down words of the soul.

This is not the way we scent our beings—not of the perfume
from the bottle, nor of the fill from lemons in the fields--
no it is a scenting of our natural self, rushing the nose
along the neckline—whilst inhaling the long deep breath.

Indeed I have gathered droplets, and still am gathering
what will overflow and make me bow, to release the
burden—and become the sculpture that we be a able
revisiting memory; a feather floating down from the sky--
from the form of a grand form of feathers, knowing more
will fall in the years that have to pass me by—
but wonder will I see them passing.

Where will the eternal dusk set; while imagination
has formed that great afterness—since then have I
feared leaving without all my feathers in place--
I just don’t want to be the dropped burden incomplete.

© Copyright 2009 Lee Hepworth - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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1 posted 2009-06-05 05:00 PM



A very significant and introspective poem, dear Lee! Loved especially the first stanza, but the whole "long day" sounds great.

Love,
Margherita


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