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Footfalls in the Mud

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ThisDiamond
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Footfalls in the Mud

I walked beside him, quietly at first, footfalls in the mud
Catching his attention as time passed in maudlin days
There were moments when I would look up and find him watching
Silently assessing if I had the right stuff, an acceptable level of cool
The mud dried hard around him, clearly he had fallen before

I leaned forward, perhaps too far sometimes
Jousting a little juice, a little saucy cocktail of laughter and longing
The mud was warm all the same, when I fell
Partially sucked into the cushion of a long standing mote

And we laughed, he and I, about how sensitive I was
There were times when I sensed a trauma there
Just behind that thick covering of aloof despondency
Sometimes, I would tiptoe up close enough to chisel the edges away

Looking forward these days to the showers of summer
Thinning the opaque mystery that molts from time to time
Barefoot now, I trail the slivers of fallen shell, like a huntress
And wonder if the bisque of belly will burn in the light of love
I carry water as happy tears, just in case

Copyright Kkh 5/29/09
© Copyright 2009 Kathleen Harris - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 05-29-2009 04:59 PM       View Profile for SlowlyFallAway   Email SlowlyFallAway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SlowlyFallAway

"There were moments when I would look up and find him watching
Silently assessing if I had the right stuff, an acceptable level of cool
The mud dried hard around him, clearly he had fallen before"

Unfortunatley carries truth. Loved it.
Bloodline
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2 posted 05-30-2009 11:26 AM       View Profile for Bloodline   Email Bloodline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bloodline

Love the images of life
in the words and emotions
in the lines,

"And we laughed, he and I, about how sensitive I was
There were times when I sensed a trauma there
Just behind that thick covering of aloof despondency
Sometimes, I would tiptoe up close enough to chisel the edges away"

Bloodline
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3 posted 05-30-2009 11:49 AM       View Profile for Osprey   Email Osprey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Osprey

I reckon, happy tears have more power than summer showers
Bill Charles
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4 posted 05-30-2009 11:19 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

ThisDiamond - you write with such delicate grace, nicely done...

BC
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5 posted 05-31-2009 01:53 AM       View Profile for Kaoru   Email Kaoru   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kaoru

This is powerful writing.

"Barefoot now, I trail the slivers of fallen shell, like a huntress
And wonder if the bisque of belly will burn in the light of love
I carry water as happy tears, just in case"

Amazing. Loved it!
BluesSerenade
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6 posted 06-01-2009 09:31 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

A real beauty, TD.  Gotta love those happy tears!!

You just write so nice~
ctowen
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7 posted 06-02-2009 02:19 PM       View Profile for ctowen   Email ctowen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ctowen's Home Page   View IP for ctowen

a great write, even if a bit muddy!

   ... has every bit of tenderness as held in those very tears.

   Ct
jwesley
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8 posted 06-02-2009 02:21 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

much enjoyed this read, my friend.

j.
Ericc
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As always - masterful writing.

Love,
Eric
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"There were times when I sensed a trauma there
Just behind that thick covering of aloof despondency"

my fav lines
all is amazing but....
i like them best
Honeybunch
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11 posted 06-07-2009 01:44 PM       View Profile for Honeybunch   Email Honeybunch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Honeybunch's Home Page   View IP for Honeybunch

Tremendous and insightful write, TD!  Never forget your water for "them there" happy tears!

Helen
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12 posted 06-08-2009 01:18 AM       View Profile for steavenr   Email steavenr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit steavenr's Home Page   View IP for steavenr

this is one of those writes that speaks to your soul and reminds you that you've just been allowed to participate in greatness...thank you for sharing...this is good (and yes, words do fail me)
kindredspirit
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13 posted 06-08-2009 05:06 PM       View Profile for kindredspirit   Email kindredspirit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kindredspirit

you write truth with bitter-sweet acuity. i will return to read again. amazing write!
Marchmadness
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14 posted 06-20-2009 04:30 PM       View Profile for Marchmadness   Email Marchmadness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marchmadness

Love the many layers of this fine poem, Kathleen.
                                 Ida
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15 posted 06-24-2009 08:01 AM       View Profile for HAZARD   Email HAZARD   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for HAZARD

Tremendous!
Its not often I really like something. But word choice, construction, pace and erudite craftsmanship is all here in abundance.  Relationships are earthy, mud drawn and bitter - yet sweet with laughter and love. Romance is uncertainty lived twice.

Hazard
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