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My first poem submission.

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Lone_Wolf84
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0 posted 05-26-2009 03:28 AM       View Profile for Lone_Wolf84   Email Lone_Wolf84   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lone_Wolf84


I should have rated first, first try of it to see what real poets would think of it. So I was anxious.

When we see reality what are we reaching after
Are we constantly pushing it ahead so it somehow happens after
Living for tommorrow becouse today is to hard
but tommorow a new day arises and a new bard will sing
But what happens when the trumpet dies out for good
Will the end be good
Or will the echoes die out
echoes never stay, the trumpet lives but people want it to rott
Forgeting the past and living for tomorrow.
Reverse it and find your balance
punish your demons with your own lance.
Aim for the heart.
If the lance doesn't work throw a dart.
rollercoaster is we want to live for.
finding the balance to grey
And then it starts again.
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1 posted 05-26-2009 11:22 AM       View Profile for JenniferMaxwell   Email JenniferMaxwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JenniferMaxwell

Welcome to PiP. I think you're really going to enjoy posting and reading here - lot's of friendly people!

Great first poem, look forward to reading more!
Earth Angel
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2 posted 05-26-2009 11:56 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

Hello, Lone Wolf! Welcome to our "Family of Friends"!
Some very interesting philosophical points to ponder in your debuting poem! Most people see only the extremes of either white or black ~ but you are able to see the grey wherein balance lies!

Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug,

Earth Angel
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3 posted 05-26-2009 12:53 PM       View Profile for WTBAKELAR   Email WTBAKELAR   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WTBAKELAR

I didn't see a reply options for comments, but did see you were looking for opinions.

Interesting philosophical ponderings.

Spelling check may help on some words, (bard)
and punctuation is random.

Welcome to PIP,  The Blue addiction.
Look forward to seeing more of your work.
Tracey

The answer is always NO, Until the question is asked.

Bloodline
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4 posted 05-26-2009 08:38 PM       View Profile for Bloodline   Email Bloodline   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bloodline

Beginnings are what every
breath is all about, your
sighs are worth reading,
write on,

Bloodline
Oklahoma Rose
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5 posted 05-27-2009 08:43 AM       View Profile for Oklahoma Rose   Email Oklahoma Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Oklahoma Rose

Welcome to Pip, Lone_Wolf. Look forward to reading more of your poems.
TheAnonDavid
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Interestng bits of homely philosophy spoilt by a lack of attention to detail as pointed out by WTBAKELAR,
Welcome to Pip
ThisDiamond
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7 posted 05-27-2009 10:44 AM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

Welcome to Passions;
You pursue a wonderful muse here,
the feeling of falling through the clouds
echoed.  A bit stumbly for the reader in the presentation, but good stock for sure!
More please
Dark Stranger
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Welcome to the bluezoo...it was cool to see "bard" used, seems it is seldom recognized...as for the poem, you will never please everyone.....so enjoy your own views and just relax and share with us  
Sunshine
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9 posted 07-08-2009 07:57 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Welcome to Passions, Wolf.

I've been remiss in welcoming our newest poets,
so please excuse the bump, but I did want
to send you a

Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

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