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We Aren't Ever Going Home (repost for the brothers & Midnitesun & everyone in between)

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icebox
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in the shadows


0 posted 05-25-2009 08:50 PM       View Profile for icebox   Email icebox   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for icebox




It is cold here
in an endless night,
easy to forget
a jungle is a desert with too much rain,
lonely now
too much awareness
from inner plains of memory,
too little pain
for all that happened,
it could be said it should hurt more
to be dead so far from home;

fear too is cold,
and in passing from all needs of life
I thought we would leave fear,
crushing weight of knowing
we weren't leaving here in any way that could be understood;

quiet now,
not like endless tearing moments of fire and steel,
I remember
how what I thought was real became a child's dream;

running,
thinking I could hide anywhere inside this shadowed valley
where we died as we were busy killing for no reason
but for rage at being killed,
at least no reason that survived;

we are waiting,
friends and enemies,
each quiet with our own separate agenda,
some around me I have recognized across what must be years
since the jungle has returned,
and there are trees where I once stood
on blasted ruined ground
mixed out of ashes,
mud,
debris and blood,
shadow memories of fire's
licking tongues without heat,
soft recall of madness
in this waking dream through which I pass
awaiting understanding that may take me out of here,
at last;

cold,
so very cold,
sun's heat passes through me without stopping.

I believe
one day I will leave behind this place of green horror
forgotten honor fertilized with death,
where nothing was resolved,
nothing lasting was attained,
where our blood is slowly washed away
every time it rains.

2004, revised 2008, 2009 by icebox


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[This message has been edited by icebox (05-26-2009 06:57 AM).]

© Copyright 2009 icebox - All Rights Reserved
Billie Cullimore
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1 posted 05-26-2009 02:19 AM       View Profile for Billie Cullimore   Email Billie Cullimore   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Billie Cullimore



May God in His goodness help to ease the pain you must feel. Time blessed time.


Love to you and yours

Billie C.
Midnitesun
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Gaia


2 posted 05-26-2009 05:28 AM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

I'm wiping away the tears as I read this.
Heart hugs...
Osprey
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3 posted 05-26-2009 06:28 AM       View Profile for Osprey   Email Osprey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Osprey

How do I reply to such a poem? It seems inadequate to say that it's a tremendous piece of writing. 'This' is the turning of the inside out; a poem to alter the mindset of the reader; a poem to make the reader dredge the rivers of his empathy, and attempt to touch the soul of the writer.
The last stanza is a poem in itself, and a brilliant conclusion.
This is my second attempt at posting a reply; if it's duplicated, then I'm only too pleased to repeat myself.
Much respect to you.
Oklahoma Rose
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4 posted 05-26-2009 10:30 PM       View Profile for Oklahoma Rose   Email Oklahoma Rose   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Oklahoma Rose

This is so sad, Icebox. God Bless you!
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


5 posted 05-26-2009 11:27 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I know cold,
but not this kind.

Well done, Sir, thank you.

Margherita
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Eternity


6 posted 05-31-2009 03:55 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

quote:
I believe
one day I will leave behind this place of green horror
forgotten honor fertilized with death,
where nothing was resolved,
nothing lasting was attained,
where our blood is slowly washed away
every time it rains.



Such a burden of pain expressed in a way that leaves one mute, because profoundly touched.

Love,
Margherita
Shadow Angel
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7 posted 06-01-2009 07:48 AM       View Profile for Shadow Angel   Email Shadow Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Shadow Angel's Home Page   View IP for Shadow Angel


quote:

crushing weight of knowing
we weren't leaving here in any way that could be understood;


~   icebox, you have my deepest respect, my friend

I have few words, other than...this is a deeply moving piece of poetry, penned with excellence

I look forward to reading more from your pen

*hugs*

Sasha xx

fmlbarebackrider2001
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8 posted 06-01-2009 11:02 AM       View Profile for fmlbarebackrider2001   Email fmlbarebackrider2001   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fmlbarebackrider2001

The only word that comes to mind is wow.

"Not everyone can be heros. Someone has to sit on the curb and clap as they pass by." Will Rogers

serenity blaze
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9 posted 06-01-2009 08:29 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

...I hope that if there is some secret tally of verbiage at the end of anything, that it will be discovered that I said "thank you" more than I've said "I'm sorry."

There now, if I was even, I'm still even.

So...thank you.

Marchmadness
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10 posted 06-04-2009 02:08 PM       View Profile for Marchmadness   Email Marchmadness   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marchmadness

Stunning write, Mr. Ice. Leaves me speechless.
                                Ida
steavenr
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11 posted 06-08-2009 01:14 AM       View Profile for steavenr   Email steavenr   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit steavenr's Home Page   View IP for steavenr

"one day I will leave behind this place of green horror
forgotten honor fertilized with death"

...powerful words in a magnificent write with a stunning ending...nicely done...
Verve
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12 posted 06-08-2009 05:09 PM       View Profile for Verve   Email Verve   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Verve



I am truly humbled... and an ardent fan now...

Someone should show this to the rest of the world... If I may have your permission, I will post it to my Facebook!

=)
passing shadows
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displaced


13 posted 06-14-2009 06:41 PM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows


Midnitesun
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Gaia


14 posted 06-14-2009 07:49 PM       View Profile for Midnitesun   Email Midnitesun   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Midnitesun

Reading again, this Flag day,
just because....
LeeJ
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since 06-19-2003
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SE PA


15 posted 06-16-2009 08:19 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

Oh Ice, this was beautifully done, but so so sad...I'm sending you hugs and prayers for a better place and time...
Love
Lee J.
 
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