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2islander2
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0 posted 2009-05-25 10:56 AM



this passing time is quite a suffering
the mind’s digressions and unfair shiftings
confronted with the realities of world,
with non listed thoughts and exaltations,
this passing time don’t let you go,
and you feel all around you and everything
the black fingers of crippling doubts, of
susceptibility about others,
true comparisons but false companions,
you feel the fingers sink down your flesh
for extracting furies of heart
and displaying your very thoughts
to the wind that blow them,
this passing time when you really do your work,
this passing time is quite a suffering.

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1 posted 2009-05-25 11:42 AM


Time to think, time to pen
those thoughts like a dart
to the heart, well done,
such poetry creates a passage,

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2 posted 2009-05-25 04:04 PM


quote:
the black fingers of crippling doubts, of
susceptibility about others,
true comparisons but false companions,
you feel the fingers sink down your flesh
for extracting furies of heart
and displaying your very thoughts



yann,

Wow.  Just wow.  This poem is really good - I don't normally single out sections, but that one section just reached out and grabbed me.

Thank you for sharing.

Alison

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2009-05-26 07:35 PM


Fine writing...James
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