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Namyh
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since 2009-01-20
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0 posted 2009-05-20 05:57 PM


Bleak and Bliss

On the slope of a hilltop,
a steep mountain did drop
down to the rapids of a river named Syn.

Panic in the rain's roar
plunged on its slanted floor.
Bleak, on a horse of bones, galloped down the wind.

Behind, Greed and Envy rode their palomino steeds
with Wrath next to Lust, and Chaos in the night.
To a town called Choice raced Bleak and his marauders
'cross a moon, where horses shine skinless in the light.

Daylight would be coming soon,
sizzling hot the sand dunes.
Faith, Hope and Charity waited dawn's light to kiss.

Their horses neighed a cry !
Love and Justice looked to sky.
On the rays thrown from Sun like a fist galloped Bliss.

On streaks of sultry sizzling sand, his horse Sunlight burned red.
Bliss waved a hand and beckoned with a blast of booming voice.
Off the sand dune they did heed, self-propelled by hoofs of speed,
to catch Sunlight's blistered blaze now inbound and aimed for Choice.

And flickering 'cross horizon stars
betwixt the moonlight's beams and bars,
Bleak and Bliss rode prairies 'til they reached a half-mile gap.

Seeing Choice ahead, they tightened reins
to jump that impasse half-mile gain,
and fearless leaped the chasm, hoofs in air, landing pat.

Our human halves of Bleak and Bliss
are flaws and strengths we would commit
to reach a Choice that we need make
requires always….. some Leap of Faith.

Namyh



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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
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1 posted 2009-05-20 06:41 PM


A beautifully constructed work, dear Namyh! Interesting personifications. Enjoyed your  great poetic and psychological performance.

"A leap of Faith" perfect conclusion!

Love,
Margherita

Heart2Heart
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since 2009-05-15
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2 posted 2009-05-21 02:13 AM


Great message in this rich poem, and your rhymes are very well done.  
Heart2Heart

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